I need a cigarette now! Seriously, I understand your trepidation. Things we write never look like things we read. I do believe that is very very good. This really should be shared. If you are afraid to take that step, I'd like to suggest passing it on to a professional voice artist who I think would be glad to read it. I will not re-share or anything - but really--- it's just to good to keep hidden away. Please just go for it. (aloud would be best)
Yes - I do. And in the interest of full disclosure. I read it for an author I know so it's not just my opinion. She is also an editor and felt that the rhythm stumbled once but agreed - you would do us all a great favor to share this.
Hmmmm... you could post it - or read it and post that - or maybe if you would prefer - I could find somebody who does voice work to read it... You know, make a big Event out of it ?
How about because this post is limited, I will post ONE here right now; it's my favorite of my own work, but other people don't always like it =/
ReplyDeletePerfect Pain
Crawling, prowling across the sheets
Some animal, some wicked beast
Primal urges pulse through hot flesh
Forced and coarse, two bodies mesh
Driven deep and wet with sin
Pounding out the beat within
Coming undone, unglued, unwired
The saintly sweet tinged with Hell’s fire
Curves and angles pulled and stretched
Deep lines of the erotic etched
Dragged across immoral ground
Crying out with immortal sound
Dive into me and fill my soul
Kill the need and make me whole
My body craves, my mind embraces
My river flows and my heart races
Harsh whispers bite into your ears
My muscles ache, eyes filled with tears
I’ve begged you to come desecrate
This hallowed ground, this holy place
Panting, paining, we pull apart
And now it’s yours, this wretched heart
With all the damage that I’d have you do
Don’t you know that I love you?
runs and hides Sharing poetry is a lot like being naked in public. No, I think I'd be better at being naked in public...*lol*
I need a cigarette now!
ReplyDeleteSeriously, I understand your trepidation. Things we write never look like things we read. I do believe that is very very good.
This really should be shared. If you are afraid to take that step, I'd like to suggest passing it on to a professional voice artist who I think would be glad to read it.
I will not re-share or anything - but really--- it's just to good to keep hidden away. Please just go for it. (aloud would be best)
sigh But...ya...I...sigh Really? You're sure this should go public? I had some mixed feedback the last time I tried anything with >.<
ReplyDeleteYes - I do. And in the interest of full disclosure. I read it for an author I know so it's not just my opinion. She is also an editor and felt that the rhythm stumbled once but agreed - you would do us all a great favor to share this.
ReplyDeleteI've tried to fix the rhythm issues, I know there are some, but it's not something I've done a lot of reading aloud of...ack! So...what next?
ReplyDeleteHmmmm... you could post it - or read it and post that - or maybe if you would prefer - I could find somebody who does voice work to read it... You know, make a big Event out of it ?
ReplyDeleteAcccck I dunno if I can deal with a 'big event' out of it. I can't read it myself, not this one. It's too personal. =/
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